个性+情感+逻辑,51offer资深文书顾问马丽玲定制文书的三大锦囊

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顾问姓名:马丽玲 Mary

顾问简介:51offer资深文书顾问,英语专业毕业,热爱英语写作,擅长商科、人文社科和传媒等多个方向的文书撰写、材料翻译及处理,文书创作融个性、情感与逻辑于一体,善于挖掘学生经历,引导帮助学生发掘自身优势,打造出一份让招生官眼前一亮的个性化文书,且运用其扎实的英语功底和独特的创新思维认真对待每一份文书,在文书中充分展现学生对专业的热爱,并进行有特色的背景包装。细心负责,力求每一位学生对文书的满意和认可。

成功案例展示

Mary老师曾成功帮助众多学生拿到QS前100院校的录取,能够结合经验和了解的行业背景,在文书写作体现出独特的见解,针对不同的学生创作出个性化的申请文书吸引admissions committee的眼球,助力学生实现梦校追求,下面给大家展示一个商科案例,给大家感受一下Mary老师的写作实力!

案例A:

陈同学

陈同学,四川某双非院校财务管理专业毕业,均分83.5,四年科技公司财务部门工作经验,想继续申请Finance方向的专业,学生只是简单说明了申请动机是出于职业晋升需要,这样的动机过于单调,为了能突出该动机同时丰富学生自身对行业的理解,在文书写作时,Mary老师以刚刚落幕的博鳌亚洲论坛上中国人民银行行长易纲的发言作为一个行业背景来描写申请人想要去英国学习的动机。既结合了当下时事说明了行业对于人才的迫切需求,也从学生角度表明她认识到进一步学习专业知识的必要性,这样精彩的开头充实且细化了学生的申请动机。此外,后续的段落中也对学生提供的经历进行了拓展,带入真情实感描述学生的成长,生动的表达提高了读者的代入感。让读者感受到学生与所申请专业的匹配度,帮助学生提升申请竞争力。

In the Boao Forum for Asia Annual Conference 2018 that recently came to an end, Mr. Yi Gang, the Governor of the People's Bank of China, announced that China will further expand the opening up of the financial industry. The upper limit of foreign shareholding ratio in financial organisations such as banks, financial asset management companies, securities companies, fund management companies, futures companies, and personal insurance companies will be loosened and even canceled, which will surely bring great opportunities for financial practitioners. I believe that this will further promote the development of China's financial industry and will also consequentially lead to an increasing demand for highly qualified financial personnel with professional financial knowledge and techniques and international perspectives as well as skill set to deal with the increasingly complex financial, investment and risk control work. However, opportunities and challenges coexist. Inevitably, this will also bring about more challenges to financial practitioners. To better prepare myself for the forthcoming opportunities and challenges, I plan to further my learning in finance in the UK at the postgraduate level.

案例B:

侯同学

侯同学,本科计算机科学与技术专业,均分75,申请Computer Science相关专业,学生自身有比较多相关经验,对专业也有一定的理解,本科期间多次参与项目的研究和创造,并且毕业后一直从事计算机行业的工作。对于这样经历丰富的学生,在文书的写作中就必须筛选有关信息,串联学生经历,层层递进突显学生的优势。Mary老师深谙其道,在文书开头就开门见山强调学生多年的工作经验告诉他IT行业一直是而且将继续是一个有前途的行业,由此引出动机;在描述学生的项目经历时,写作逻辑清晰,采用总分总式结构详述学生在理论学习与实践经验之间的能力转化,从而突出学生扎实的专业技能。

Rather than confining myself to academic study, I actively took part in practical projects to develop my programming proficiency. In the second term of my freshman year, I generated the idea of developing a takeout network platform after hearing my classmates complaining about the takeout service of some large platforms. Without any delay, I called several classmates together and started the project. As the team leader, I assigned the tasks such as demand analysis, product design and code compilation to different members according to the field of their expertise or preference. I myself achieved the synchronization of the communication between the server and clients of the platform through Java. We all made arduous efforts, but to our relief, the platform we developed had won us great praise from the restaurant owners around our university and our schoolmates. Subsequent to this project, I participated in another project as the team leader to develop The Game of Killing through C#. Together with my team members, we designed many programmes and spent endless hours debugging our codes. The game was promoted among the dormitories rapidly only a few days after its launch. Apart from gaining practical programming skills through these projects, I also strengthened my analytical ability, teamwork ability, leadership, and communication skills.

顾问感言

文书是每一位学生在申请过程中的重要环节,意味着我承载着学生对我的信任和期许,我希望竭尽所能,用我的写作经验和英语知识助力学生实现他们的名校梦,在这个过程中,我会面对不同的学生,感受他们不同的人生经历,收获更多的写作经验,何尝不是在与学生们一起成长为更好的自己呢。其实每当看到学生拿到心仪学校的offer,这也是意味着自己付出的努力得到了肯定,我会像自己拿到offer一样开心,或许这就是工作给予我的回报与快乐吧。

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