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顾问姓名:李小英 Jenna

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部分成功案例展示

案例A:帝国理工学院 - 张同学

张同学,来自中南大学,土木工程专业,均分85.33,申请目标为G5院校。

在收到张同学的成绩单后,李老师发现成绩单里至少十一门核心课程的分数只有70多。虽然选校方案中有爱大、布大等相对成功率较高的学校,但是因为这些核心课程的成绩导致帝国理工学院、伦敦大学学院这两所G5院校的申请难度是有增加的。为了弥补张同学在成绩上的不足,李老师在文书写作中尽可能地突出其科研项目、实习等个人经历以展现软实力、以及对于土木工程专业的深刻认识。

The most tangible changes brought about by the state's economic prosperity must be the towering buildings, elaborately-connected road networks and intricately laid pipelines, all of which fall within the sphere of civil engineering whose goal is to form a well-functioning, comfortable and convenient space for humans. It does not only involve material needs, but also symbolic spiritual pursuits. As it stands, civil engineering constructs the substantial basis for a state's economic and cultural development. For thousands of years, a miraculous change has taken place in the basic form of civil engineering, from the original cave into diverse exquisite high-rises, from above-ground buildings to underground facilities. With the application of new materials and technologies, it can be expected that the civil engineering will march forward into oceans, deserts and even the sky in the near future.

Meanwhile, along with new construction sprouting up, unreasonable and excessive development and utilization of space ensues, and this contradiction is in increasing prominence. To realize a favorable interplay between environment and industry development is both the responsibility and the goal of practitioners in this sector. The same duty goes for me. As I anticipate engaging in the R&D of new engineering materials, which are environmentally friendly and durable, more advanced studies at a leading university is the first but foremost step to fulfill my aspiration.

申请递交后,张同学拿到了几所学校的录取,然而,在经过一番焦急的等待后,UCL来了审理结果,是拒信。虽然能够理解学校的这一结果大概率是因为核心课程的分数,但是考虑到张同学有参加不少科研项目和高质量竞赛等,李老师还是想要帮张同学争取一个机会,于是第一时间联系张同学提出进行argue。为了提升argue成功概率,李老师建议补充一些材料并指导了从哪几个方面准备,如提供之前参加的项目的论文、汇总本科期间课程上的设计成果。有不少东西是有现成的中文版的资料的,但是张同学对于如何梳理、如何选取是迷茫的,李老师凭借丰富的经验给出了非常详细的建议以及翻译上的指导,并制作了一封内容长达700多字的邮件,分别作为argue信和love letter的形式发给了UCL和IC。尽管UCL还是坚持之前的审理结果就是最终的结果,但是IC却在收到邮件的两周后给张同学发来了2021年春节的最好的新年礼物。

案例B:伦敦大学学院 -- 陈同学 

陈同学,来自东北师范大学,运动训练,均分85.91,申请目标为G5学校。

学生的目标很明确,就是想冲刺G5学校,硕士阶段想要继续学习体育运动方面的专业,但是也不排除继续进学校担任老师的可能,所以李老师在给学生定位的时候主要是从两个方面出发。一是结合学生毕业后担任了两年体育老师的经验,给学生敲定了教育方向的申请方案,申请的学校有伦敦大学学院、牛津大学爱丁堡大学曼彻斯特大学杜伦大学。二是从学生的本科专业出发,敲定了伦敦大学学院、格拉斯哥大学拉夫堡大学的运动医学和健康相关专业。

最终,学生拿到了包含伦敦大学学院(教育学)在内的多所学校的offer并最终入读伦敦大学学院。

案例C:伦敦大学学院 -- 刘同学 

刘同学,来自兰州大学,教育学专业,GPA3.85/5,想申请杜伦大学。

刘同学在开始咨询的时候告知大四毕业后已在其他机构申请了,刘同学的dream school是杜伦大学,但是没有申请上,第二年想重新申请,申请学校为伦敦大学学院、爱丁堡大学、杜伦大学和布里斯托大学

李老师在看过刘同学的材料后,发现刘同学经历很丰富,在校期间有参加很多活动,但是前一年的申请文书就是简单地按照时间顺序罗列了经历,就像记流水账,没有拓展,更别提挖掘经历中的亮点了。在经过一番研究后,李老师挑选了刘同学几个深度参与的活动,深入挖掘活动中的亮点,并结合过去一年的教育经历,对刘同学的经历做了很多的拓展,以突出其对教育学的兴趣和向往。

文书完成后,得到了刘同学的高度认可,最终刘同学顺利拿到申请的全部四所学校的offer。

Last May, I successfully landed my first job as an educator, working as a lecturer in Offcn Education & Technology Co., Ltd, one of the major vocational education institutions in China. My job responsibility mainly includes providing interview training to students who have passed the written part of civil service examinations. To ensure that each student will be engaged in classroom discussions, I have referred to books and consulted experienced teachers to make the classroom questioning and activities well-designed and innovative. A large proportion of the 20 classes I taught achieved a perfect passing rate of 100% in the interview section of civil service examinations. I had won the First Place in the Interview Teaching Competitions organised by the company and was awarded the title of "Interview Share Star of Offcn Education" for many times, which I consider as the recognition of my teaching performance. On the one hand, my one and half years' teaching experience has made me more determined to devote myself to education and dedicate my life to pass on knowledge. On the other hand, I have dramatically improved my practical teaching skills and have been quite capable of grasping the psychology of students.

案例D:皇家艺术学院 -- 鲍同学

鲍同学,来自东华大学,工业设计专业,GPA3.15/4,想申请时装相关的专业,最终敲定的方案是中央圣马丁艺术与设计学院、伦敦时装学院和皇家艺术学院的时装相关专业。

李老师认为,虽然学生的背景不错,但是本科专业与申请的专业还是有较大的不同。另外,学生有一年店铺陈列设计助理的工作经验,且大学期间有在GUCCI等企业实习,所以在文书写作时突出了鲍同学的实习,通过实习,了解了行业的流行趋势和提升了设计技巧,并在随后的工作中加深了对各种材料的特性与加工工艺有了更加深入的了解。

最终鲍同学成功入读皇家艺术学院(艺术界的牛津剑桥)。

Moreover, I also immersed myself in internships so as to gain more practical experience and expose myself to the latest fashion trends. In March 2015, I luckily entered the Visual Merchandising Department of GUCCI (China) Trading Co., Ltd. At first, I was allocated some fundamental work such as arranging delivery to send display props to stores in different cities and collecting display information of competitive brands. But I took the initiative to familiarise myself with the products and current trends by searching all kinds of information. And later, I tried to express my ideas about the product display in the regular meetings and I would sometimes explain my ideas with the effect pictures I drew. My ideas were greatly praised by the department colleagues, and I was assigned to shoulder extra responsibility of drawing effect pictures of display. The experience accumulated in this internship helped me to well adapt to the work in Achette Shanghai Co., Ltd. As an intern in the product team of the Marketing Department, I was in charge of the information collection and analysis of the seasonal fashion trends, product display of the store in Shanghai and the selection and procurement of display props. This internship had further enhanced my insight into fashion trends and determination to be part of the fashion industry.

多年来,李老师拥有极高的客户满意度和口碑率,用心帮助每一位学生获得最理想的申请结果,涉及专业广泛,善于挖掘学生优点,彰显学生优势,竭尽所能帮助学生实现留学梦。

标签: 留学专家秀 英国G5 留学个人陈述 发布于:2022-6-08 15:46